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Aug 7, 2005 3:02:35 GMT -5
Post by Courtney Delacour on Aug 7, 2005 3:02:35 GMT -5
I thought I would share this poem. Comments/Critique is welcome. To Feel I must give up on my life, can someone please turn me into a stone. The desert wind quite suites me, no heart, no mind, just all alone.
It would just be ignorant to try, to feel and want something ever again. Wanting turns into need, feelings turn into pain.
I laughed at the thought of love, who can trust someone's word. To make all my happiness depend on someone, and give all my faith, seem so absurd.
I lay cold and all alone, sleepless in my cold, empty bed. Still numb, still dumb, still ice, ice cold. Not knowing that I was dead.
And then you came with warmth, in my meadow, covered with snow, and you saw the flowers, that love could only recognize and grow.
It was you, who made me feel so much beauty, I shed my cold, cold skin, and opened my heart up to you, and, without fear, I let you in.
And now, my sweeheart, I am in love, with all that I have gone through, I have seen and know the worst of the world, And I believe in you.
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Aug 15, 2005 10:16:08 GMT -5
Post by Brynn Lovegood on Aug 15, 2005 10:16:08 GMT -5
Wow! That was . . . AWESOME!!! Very light hearted, and soooo good! Bravo! Encore!
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Sept 8, 2005 21:49:04 GMT -5
Post by xfdd11 on Sept 8, 2005 21:49:04 GMT -5
I agree with Brynn. That was such a beautiful poem! The descriptions of your surroundings used as Analogies was terrific! definately a 10 on a scale of 1-5!!!!!
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Jessica La' Port
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Feb 4, 2006 17:31:32 GMT -5
Post by Jessica La' Port on Feb 4, 2006 17:31:32 GMT -5
mabey she can give me lossons Im just a beginer.
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Aries Stormrage
First Year Slytherin
Life is nothing but the time of Death.
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Feb 18, 2010 18:10:42 GMT -5
Post by Aries Stormrage on Feb 18, 2010 18:10:42 GMT -5
I always liked this poem.. very well done.
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Zanna Gem
First Year Ravenclaw
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The Darkness Curse, It hurts others. It makes them fear me. I am the queen of the night...
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Feb 20, 2010 3:07:25 GMT -5
Post by Zanna Gem on Feb 20, 2010 3:07:25 GMT -5
Woah, very emotional poem! It shows MUCH feeling!
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